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The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005.
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The bar chart given
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 the government for four countries spending their
money
 on road and transport.
Overall
, Portugal spent the highest amount of
money
 on road and transport,
while
 the
UK
 spent the least. First of all,
Italia
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Italy
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 and Portugal had
a
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slightly different
of
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the
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money
spending
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries (
UK
 and
USA
). In 1990, Portugal spent the highest
money
 between 1990 to 2005 with 27% in 1990,
while
Italia
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Italy
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 disbursed only 22% which differed by 5%. In 1995,
Italia
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Italy
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 was still lower than Portugal, but in 2000, the government decided to waste more
money
 for the first time at 27%. In 2005, Portugal expended 20% of the
money
 which indicated the government tended to decrease gradually over the period given followed by
Italia
. Moving on to the
UK
 and
USA
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the USA
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 which spent ower
money
 than
Italia
 and Portugal, in 1990,
USA
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the USA
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 pay of around 11%
money
 and the
UK
 waste only
exact
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 10%.
Moreover
, in 1995, the
USA
still
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 larger than
UK
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the UK
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.
In contrast
, in 2000 the
UK
 and the
USA
 had roughly identical percentages at 14%.
However
, the
UK
, in 2005 disbursed the lowest
money
, but the
USA
 increased to 15%
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