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Discussion Theme: Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

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Many
people
 think, that it is good living in the
city
, but others reckon
the
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living in the village. In my opinion first
though
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thought
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 is good. Few
people
 choose to
living
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live
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 in the countryside because there are
little car
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few cars
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 and
therefore
air
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the air
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 in there is fresh. That's why many
people
 who live in
drop
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 are clever and healthy because their brain breathes fresh air. And one of the good
side
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sides
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living
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of living
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 in there is quietly because
although
 the area is
a
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large few
people
 live here and
therefore
 there it's mostly
quite
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quiet
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 here resulting in
peoples
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people's
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nerve
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nerves
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 will be
bend
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bent
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. Some decide the living in
city
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the city
a city
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 and one of the good
side
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sides
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living
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of living
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 there is comfort because
there
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it
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 is developed and
people
 know how to live because folk have seen engineering and they want
this
.
As a
result
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 human
starts
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tostarts
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 respect
himself
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themselves
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.
People
 fixed
this
 because there good education because educated
people
 do not want to work and live in the countryside they will choose to live in the
city
. If
people
strengles
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strangles
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people
 moved to there and the whole country becomes the
city
 In
summary
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 though living in
countryside
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the countryside
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 is good and useful, in my opinion living in the
city
 can develop not only a person but
also
 the state.
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