Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In
todays'
world, a great number of Change noun form
today's
people
believe that the legislation of death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
for people
who commited
violent Correct your spelling
committed
commit
crimes
is unreasonable. In spite of this
statement, I oppose to
that idea and believe that the government should advocate Change preposition
apply
death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
to
criminals that commit excessive Change preposition
for
crimes
. In this
essay
I will discuss Add a comma
,essay
this
issue and will explain my opinion.
Firstly
, Having death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
can decrease crime
rate. Having a punishment Add an article
the crime
that is
so extreme
optional might prevent criminals from making useless risks and would avoid committing a felony. Change the word
extremely
Although
forming legislation of
Change preposition
on
death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
will not prevent every single crime from being commited
, I do believe that it will help create a downfall in the Correct your spelling
committed
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
crimes
.
Furthermore
, the death
of a violent criminal would make society a safer place. Having death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
legal to
a person who made terrible felonies will guarantee that Change preposition
for
this
prisoner will not return to the streets after finishing his sentance
. Correct your spelling
sentence
Consequently
, it will prevent any future crimes
being
Change preposition
from being
commited
Correct your spelling
committed
from
the specific criminal, Change preposition
by
for example
, a seriel
killer who was bound to Correct your spelling
serial
death
will prevent any further
murders.
On the other hand
, some people
say that “A violent
crime” is an Correct article usage
Violent
unbased
term and has a grey area. Correct your spelling
unbiased
For instance
, some could say that shoplifting counts as a violent crime exactly like murder. Since it's an individual opinion, having death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
a possibility for every single criminal could lead to wrong
Add an article
a wrong
the wrong
decision
from Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
court
and could cause unnecessary deaths. Add an article
the court
However
, in an extremely violent
Correct the article-noun agreement
extremely violent cases
an extremely violent case
cases
there are many Add a comma
,cases
people
involved throughout court
, Add an article
the court
such
as the state, jury and a judge who will advise with
each other in order to make the right decision.
In conclusion, despite Change preposition
apply
death
Correct article usage
the death
penalty
is
an outdated idea and can lead to unjustified punishments, Wrong verb form
being
i
think that the government should be able to use Change the capitalization
I
death
Add an article
the death
penalty
for extremly
violent cases in order to live in a safer society.Correct your spelling
extremely
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