The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The diagram reveals the steps for producing
milk
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and its derivatives.
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, the process of
milk
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production involves 8 stages. The first to the third stages usually takes place on the farmland
while
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the fifth to eighth stages occurs in the factory where the
milk
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is processed. The animals are reared on the
farm land
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farmland
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where they
feeds
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feed
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on grasses which
is
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are
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their
solely
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source of food.
Ability
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The ability
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of the animals to produce
milk
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depends on how well fed. The extraction of
milk
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is done by a machine twice a day. The animals are positioned
onto
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the machine. The extracted
milk
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are
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taken directly to the refrigerator where it is stored temporarily to prevent sourness and bacteria growth. The refrigerator operates at a particular temperature that helps to maintain its quality.
Milk
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is transported via a
milk
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van to the city for processing into consumable derivatives. The van must deliver the extracted
milk
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to the factory on a daily basis. On getting to the factory, the van offloads itself into the machine where it is processed into different consumables
such
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as cheese, cream and butter.
Milk
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products
goes
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through the pasteurization
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