The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.
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The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing milk and its other products.
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, it is a process consisting of 8 stages beginning with the grazing of cows and ending with the display for sale in supermarkets. To start with, cows are fed adequately with grasses for them to be healthy after which these grazed healthy cows are milked two times a day with the use of a milking machine.
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, the collected buttermilk is stored and preserved inside the refrigerator so as to prevent it from getting sour as it awaits transportation by the tanker and eventually, it is carried and delivered to the dairy on a daily basis.
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on getting to the dairy, the cream is
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stored in different containers where some are processed into milk after which it undergoes pasteurization and
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packaged in bottles,
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another is processed separately into other dairy products
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as cheese, cream and butter.
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, the end products are transposed and displayed for sale in shops and superstores ready to be sold.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • milking machines
  • containers
  • refrigerated trucks
  • pasteurization
  • homogenization
  • separation
  • standardization
  • cream
  • skim milk
  • fat content
  • packaging
  • cartons
  • bottles
  • dairy processing plant
  • quality control
  • safety and quality standards
  • distribution
  • retailers
  • grocery stores
  • vendors
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