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The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting the main features .

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting the main features .
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A pictorial illustration of
milk
 manufacturing and its derivatives.
Overall
, there are eight steps in
this
 process of
milk
 production.
The first step is
the
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cow grazing which occurs on the farm. The cattle are well-fed till maturation for adequate
milk
 extraction.
Milk
 is collected twice daily using a machine, which delivers daily in a tanker to the
dairy
. At the
dairy
milk
 is converted to
to
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cheese, cream and butter.
Also
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 pasteurization and packaging
occurs
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 at the
dairy
.
However
, the end process is the dispatch of the
dairy
 products, to the final consumer which is made through sales in the supermarkets and shops.
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