The diagram shows the process by which milk related products are produced

The diagram shows the process by which milk related products are produced
The images explain the processes involved in the production of milk and its by-products.
This
is processed by the milking machine, transferred and packed in a container for consumers.
Overall
, the production involves two main parts. The first stage involves processes at the farm consisting of four steps
also
, and the second part consists of four stages as well which took place in the factory.
To begin
with, the steps that take place on the farm involve cattle grazing,these cows are milked twice every day by a milking machine, and the milk extracted is stored in the refrigerator for preservation which is later transported daily by a van to the factory for the second stage.
Moreover
,moving on to dairy at the factory where the product is transferred into a machine which separates it into either cheese, cream or butter which are other products.
Furthermore
, the milk is
also
pasteurized and packaged in different sizes thereby send to shops and supermarkets for final consumers.
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