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The graph illustrates the amount of waste produced by three companies during 15 years. It can observed that over this period number for a and b companies hit the highest points.

The graph illustrates the amount of waste produced by three companies during 15 years. It can observed that over this period number for a and b companies hit the highest points.
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The graph illustrates the amount of
waste
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 produced by three companies
during
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over
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 15 years. It can
observed
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be observed
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 that over
this
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 period number for a and
b
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 companies hit the highest points. Beginning with the growth figures in 2000
company
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 A hit the highest
point
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about
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of about
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 12
tonnes
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.
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However
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,However
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company
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C
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 accounted for 4
tonnes
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 and experienced the lowest
point
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 in 2000. From 2000 to 2005
company
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 A
drammatically
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dramatically
 decreased to 10
tonnes
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 of
waste
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.
However
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,
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the figures
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figures
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figure
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 for
company
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B
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 was 11
tonnes
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 of
waste
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. But,
company
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C
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 was around 6
tonnes
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. Turning to the other sectors, from 2005 to 2010. In 2010
company
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 A
didnt
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didn't
 stop
to decrease
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decreasing
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.
However
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,
company
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B
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 started to decrease
drammatically
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dramatically
 almost like
company
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 A. But,
numbers
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the numbers
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 for
company
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C
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 experienced the highest
point
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 about 10
tonnes
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 of
waste
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.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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company
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B
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 was 7
tonnes
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, and
company
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 A was around 8.
in
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In
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 2015
company
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a
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A
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 slightly decreased to 7 and was almost stabilized from 2015.
However
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, trends for
company
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B
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 hit the lowest
point
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 about 3
tonnes
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 of
waste
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 and stabilized. And
company
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C
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 increased and experienced the highest
point
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 about 10
tonnes
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 of
waste
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.
Thus
Linking Words
, from 2000 to 2005
company
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B
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 was the highest
point
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. But from 2010 to 2015
company
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C
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 experienced the highest
point
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, b, company, point, tonnes, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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