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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000
#levels #air #pollutants #cities
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The bar chart illustrates the highest and the lowest
levels
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 of Dinitrous Oxide and Sulphur Dioxide daily in 4
cities
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 including
Los
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Angeles
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,
Calcutta
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, Beijing,
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Mexico
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and Mexico
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City
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 in 2000.
Overall
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,
Mexico
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City
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 consumed much more of both gases than the other
cities
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.
While
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Mexico
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City
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 and
Los
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Angeles
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 spent more N2O than SO2, SO2 became prevalent gas rather than N2O in
Calcutta
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 and Beijing. In terms of
Los
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Angeles
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, the figure for the amount of SO2 ranged from 2 to 10 which was the lowest
in
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of
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4
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the 4
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cities
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.
In contrast
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, the presence of
this
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 air in
Mexico
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City
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 varied from 80 to 200 which was the highest. Regarding
levels
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N2O
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of N2O
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 in
Los
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Angeles
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, it reached peak and bottom at 39 and 104 respectively which was the second rank,
whereas
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Mexico
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City
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 still was the first rank in
levels
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 of N2O fluctuating between 113 and 207. In terms of
Calcutta
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, the maximum and minimum
levels
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 of SO2 were 47 and 59 respectively,
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 the figure in Beijing ranged from 25 to 100.
On the other hand
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, the presence
for
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of
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 N2O in these 2
cities
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 reached a peak at approximately the highest
levels
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,
while
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 the lowest in
Calcutta
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 was almost double that of Beijing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, cities, los, angeles, calcutta, mexico, city, n with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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