Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

Technology developments have changed
people
’s lives in many aspects. Some
people
consider the changes are positive and
some
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others hold
counter arguments
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. In my opinion, modern
technologies
bring about positive effects more than negative effects. Supporters
for
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the positive effects
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from modern
technologies
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that they help
people
have closer connections.
For example
, owing to the development of social
media
,
people
nowadays contact
with
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their friends or relatives more frequently than before, enabling
people
to receive the most updated news of their friends and provide necessary assistance.
Furthermore
, modern
technologies
also
help business increase their efficiency by exploiting more robots
to
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manufacturing or holding online meetings. These are only some parts of
many
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benefits attributed to
technology
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developments.
In contrast
, many
people
argue that
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modern technology brings disadvantages more than advantages. To illustrate, children may focus on their social
media
instead
of
having
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interaction with others in person when they participate in festival celebrations or important events. Many parents consider
this
behavior
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impolite and
hence
do not support their children to use social
media
.
People
holding
this
viewpoint mainly think
the
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modern
technologies
downgrade the quality of
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interaction by distracting
people
with social
media
. In my opinion, I think modern
technologies
certainly lead to some disadvantages.
However
, I believe that if
technologies
are applied properly, they can create many benefits
to
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.
People
should have more intention on when to
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certain
technologies
and refrain from using
it
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in improper venues.
Overall
, modern
technologies
have brought many advantages to
people
by helping
people
have stronger connections than before.
However
,
people
should
also
have attention
on
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using these
technologies
properly and
preventing
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themselves from being impolite when interacting with
people
in person.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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