As a result of electronic invitations such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays a large number of
people
use
electronic invitations like a computer and so on. But some
people
think so one negative side is that
this
kind of
technology
will be effected on their health. I definitely
agree
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this
side. I will explain in my essay why I choose
this
way. In our rapidly changing world,
technology
is
very
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important part of our life. Because in our daily
life
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many
people
use
the
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any type of
technology
in
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everywhere
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example, work, study or
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the phone or computer, one best side is that when
people
have
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with something they can solve problems
such
as don't understand something .On top of that, developing technologies are creating new opportunities for us.
for example
, we can learn useful things from our mobile phones,
that is
, we can acquire worldly knowledge online, expand our thinking and discover new ideas, and thereby contribute to the development of the country.
On the other hand
,it can be noted that
technology
is not only an important part of our life but
also
creates some problems.
for example
,
as a result
of young
people
's improper
use
of mobile communication devices and computers, negative problems are arising in our society.
In addition
, I should mention that excessive
use
of various technologies causes
people
to get some diseases. especially
people
are harmed by technologies used without physical movement.In my
opinion
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this
situation should not be ignored. because the
use
of social networks or
technology
without much physical activity naturally leads to
lack
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of communication and several diseases in humans. In a nutshell, as I mentioned above, if we
use
technology
in large quantities,
people
will lose interest in the natural environment and become laziness and many other consequences
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