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What is the positive or negative think you life in Jogjakarta

To begin
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Jogjakarta
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 is
a
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part of
a
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big city in Indonesia well-known as a student and tourism city.
In addition
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, one of the new situations that makes me feel
inconvenience
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life
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 in
Jogjakarta
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 is
traffic
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the traffic
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 jump. The main cause of
this
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 problem is people come from different regions come to
Jogjakarta
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 not only to pursue studies but
also
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 to go on vacation .
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, traffic congestion is familiar
in
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on
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 every road in
Jogjakarta
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 compared to my previous hometown Ngawi. In my
perspective
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,perspective
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 the government should provide public transportation with more affordable and
convenience
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 facilities to decrease
this
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 problem.
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, people should consider themselves using public transportation. Because, as we know in the latest world, air pollution
that is
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 brought on by private transportation is becoming a crucial issue that should be overcome quickly.
On the other hand
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, Jokjakarta
also
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 gives me a positive impression of life there. One of the good experiences is the cultural situation.
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, people in
Jogjakarta
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 are popular with a friendly attitude. Another thing is, the cosy places to learn in
Jogjakarta
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.
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, a lot
Caffe
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of Caffe
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 and
park
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parks
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 provide facilities to support comfortable learning vibes,
such
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 as; free internet and water access. Because of that, I feel enjoy life in
Jogjakarta
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although
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 sometimes feel so bored with the traffic congested situation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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