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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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The importance of animal
experiments
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 cannot be
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. Animal
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modern society by helping medical products or treatments safer.
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, many argue that animal
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 are inhumane
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 given that the
animals
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 may need to suffer painful conditions.
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 the disadvantages proposed by those who disagree
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experiments
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 seem reasonable, I believe that animal
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 are still needed.
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animal
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 have impacts on only a few
animals
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 of a species. When conducting research
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animals
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, researchers only use a number of
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 and do not put the whole species
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risks
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.
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, nowadays, many research institutes have independent committees to make sure that the researchers follow
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 instructions, limiting the damage to the species and the environment.
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the outcomes of animal
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 are more important than the consequences for certain
animals
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.
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, if a biology company does not conduct animal
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 when inventing a new vaccine and directly applies it
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 humans, side effects may happen
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 and cause a fatal situation.
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, I believe that animal
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 have their
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 and should not be forbidden just owing to
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 reason of inhumane.
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some
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 that counter animal
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 claim a reason that those
animals
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 should not suffer the painful experiment. I believe that it is true that those
animals
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 do not deserve
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 experience.
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, do these
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 ever consider
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the situation and the risk that may happen
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 humans? In my opinion, many research institutes are making efforts to reduce the impact on
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animals
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 and since animal
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 are a kind of protection for humans,
people
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 who disagree with animal
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 should either propose a solution or stop having
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, I believe that animal
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 are justified and needed because of their importance for
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modern society and
people
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’s safety about taking treatments or medicine.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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