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The bar charts show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

The bar charts show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001
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The chart gives information on the duration used per tutor in lecturing primary, lower secondary and upper secondary
institution
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institutions
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 in Japan, Spain, Iceland and the United States of America in the year 2001. It is measured in
number
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a number
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 of
hours
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.
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, it is observable that despite the fluctuations, teachers of upper secondary
institution
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institutions
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 spent the highest number of
hours
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 in the four countries with those in the U.S.A taking the lead as against those in
primary
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the primary
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department
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departments
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 who used the
least
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last
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 time.
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, Educators in Spain and Iceland spent equal
hours
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 educating upper-class
institute
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institutes
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 as against the number of
hours
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 used for elementary school which are 700
hours
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 and 590
hours
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 respectively.
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, academicians spent about 700
hours
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 in Spain whilst 600
hours
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 in Iceland for pre-upper secondary school.
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, Japanese teachers lectured pre-secondary students for 600
hours
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while
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the U.S.A
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U.S.A
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U.S.A.
 expended a little above that for their students in
this
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 same category.
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, the
U.S.A
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U.S.A's
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 lower institution used a little above 600
hours
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 when compared with the U.S.A which spent about a month.
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, the duration spent by U.S.A lecturers was about two times that spent in Japan.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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