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A friend from another country is moving to your city Say how your friend can meet now people there

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Dear Betty, I have recently become aware of your decision to change your location and I am writing to enquire about you how can I help you to find the most exciting place to live
as well as
 in what ways you are able to communicate by public transport.
Although
 Isfahan has been recently counted as one of the most crowded places to live in Iran it seems that there are some amazing locations where you can choose to live.
For instance
, I recommend you to live in Mardavij which is a quiet and well-known place with magnificent views of the ancient bridges of the Zayandehrood River in which you can make relaxation in every evening alongside the river.
Furthermore
, if you have great enthusiasm for shopping you will have access to different types of shopping centres and transportation facilities easily.
Hence
, there is wonderful potential for transportation systems in Isfahan.
For example
, you can take yellow taxis to get to your destinations everywhere you want or use the Underground to reach your locations conveniently.
In addition
, the red buses which are called BRT are known as the fastest kind of transportation that move passengers very quickly.
Also
, if you are interested to meet new people it is better to go to NaghsheJahan Square where there are
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 number of tourists and you have a great chance to communicate with them.
Moreover
, you are able to find new friends in coffee shops and famous restaurants. Best Regards Amir
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