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The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The lecturer discusses
about
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the main
feactures
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features
 of
neuron
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neurons
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, and he divides
neuron
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neurons
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 into seven parts to report.
Also
, he indicates the function that each part
have
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 served.
First,
ball-like
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cell
body
, one of the most important pieces in a
neuron
, is the core of the
neuron
, and it is responsible for soma. Dendrites, which the
cell
body
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 in, can receive messages from other cells. When dendrites obtain the message.
Axon
, between
cell
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body
 and terminal buttons, is able to pass messages away from other
cells
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body
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 to other neurons, muscles, or glands. Beneath the
axon
, there has some electrical signal
traveling
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 down
axon
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the axon
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.
Furthermore
,
Myelin
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 sheath that covers the
axon
 helps speed neural impulses.
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, terminal buttons are able to link or connect
another cells
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, in order to pass the electrical signal. Terminal
bottons
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buttons
 will link with another
cell
's dendrites. Because neurons connect with each other, the
controling
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controlling
control
 messages are able to pass through these neurons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • neuron
  • nervous system
  • dendrites
  • soma
  • cell body
  • nucleus
  • axon
  • electrical impulses
  • myelin sheath
  • axon terminals
  • neurotransmitters
  • synapse
  • signal transmission
  • insulating
  • unmyelinated fibers
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