the graph below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the number of people killed in road accidents, over an eight_year priod since the introduction of speed cameras. the tables show the results of a survey on people's opinions on speed cameras.
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The presented graphs depict the
number
of drivers in the UK were
caught by speed Correct pronoun usage
who were
cameras
which
placed on roads, and the Correct pronoun usage
apply
number
of people who killed
in Add a missing verb
were killed
road
accidents
, during Correct article usage
the eight_year
eight_year
period since the speed Correct your spelling
eight-year
cameras
lunched
. Correct your spelling
launched
Moreover
, the tables illustrate people’s point
of view on speed Fix the agreement mistake
points
cameras
.
The first graph shows that 200,000 drivers were caught speeding in the first year and also
this
amount have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
rose
slightly to 1,600,000 drivers in 8 Change the verb form
risen
years
which means speed cameras
do no
seem really useful over an eight _year period in reducing of disobey of rules.
The second graph Correct your spelling
not
demonstrate
the Change the verb form
demonstrates
steadily
amount of Change the word
steady
road
accidents
fatalities during the Change the noun form
accident
years
. Furthermore
, in the first year, accidents
have been 3,000 but it has
fluctuation line between 3,000 and 3,500 in the following eight Unnecessary verb
apply
years
. In addition
, tables show the results of a survey on people’s opinions on speed cameras
. While
,
most Remove the comma
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
people Correct article usage
apply
are
agree that speed Unnecessary verb
apply
cameras
do not play the roll
and Correct your spelling
role
they
are worthless in reducing the Correct pronoun usage
apply
number
of accidents
. However
, they think that the main reason for the installation of speed cameras
is to raise revenue which achive
71 Correct your spelling
achieves
percent
and another view Change the spelling
per cent
that is
applied to improve road
safety with less than 30 ratio
. Change to a plural noun
ratios
Besides
, they believe that the number
of cameras
on the road
is too many and have
more than a half percentage Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
a few people say that the speed cameras
are too few and about right
Correct article usage
the right
number
on the roads.
Overall
, both graphs and tables are shown that although
the number
of speed cameras
increased during
the Change preposition
over
years
but
it doesn’t have a useful impact Remove the conjunction
apply
in
Change preposition
on
road
accidents
as well, this
huge number
of existing cameras
are
meaningless.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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