The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given line graph illustrates two types of
marketsclosing
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markets closing
market closing
and
openings
of new
markets
in a certain country, from 2011 to 2018. It can be clearly seen that the
amount
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number
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of closings and the
amount
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number
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of
openings
fluctuated over the given time period.
To begin
, in 2011 roughly 6400
markets
closed. The figures for closing fluctuated over the next four years until 2015, and there was a dramatic fall in closing to approximately 700
markets
. The next year, the figures
of
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markets
closing their doors increased dramatically, reaching 5, 100. The statistics remained steady, for the given time period. When it comes to new
markets
openings
decreased significantly, from 2011 (roughly 8500) to 2012 (merely under 4, 000) the contrary returned by roughly 50% by 2014, the following year the
amount
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number
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of
openings
fell down from 2014 to 6, 000) to 2015 (4, 000),
on the
contrary
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remained steady for the next two years.
Lastly
, after a few fluctuations, in 2018 the figures for new
markets
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market
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openings
saw a
further
fall to 3, 000
openings
, and
this
is the lowest figure observed in seven years. In sum, the most noticeable in the graph is that the
amount
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number
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of
markets
closing and the
amount
for
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of
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new
markets
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market
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openings
recorded a similar trend and
also
a fluctuating trend over the given time period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words openings, markets, amount with synonyms.
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  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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