some people think that developments involving the internet have brought people closer together while others think that people and communities more isolated .discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some humankind think that developments like the
internet
have made them
more
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nearer together, but
some other
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others
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consider that the
internet
causes isolation between
people
and communities. In our
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we discuss both these points of view, and I believe that the
internet
help
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a
lot
of
people
to become closer, so our world
have
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become one village. At the outset, the
internet
has some disadvantages, which could affect negatively
on
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the relation and
connection
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between
people
in our society.
Firstly
, when
people
spend a
lot
of time online, it reduces the direct contact and
deal
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with the
people
in our immediate surroundings.
Secondly
, real home
visiting
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between relatives and friends
also
decrease
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, because they communicate via social networking platforms.
Thirdly
,if social media platforms
is
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used to transfer false information and malicious
gossips
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, it will
creates
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a
lot
of problems between
people
, so it has some negative effects, but we have to do our best to avoid it. In my opinion , I strongly recommend using the
internet
, as it introduces a
lot
of benefits to our world, and
the
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most important
one
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, it makes
people
closer together.
for example
, social media platforms,
such
as
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Up,
Face Book
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, and other applications
enables
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enable
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humankind to make affordable or free voices and videos between friends, relatives and colleagues.
In addition
to that, it helps us to search
on line
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and find long-lost friends.
Moreover
, we can easily recognize
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people
who have similar interests,
therefore
, we can share knowledge and thoughts where we are at the same moment.so, we have to focus more on advantages than disadvantages.
To conclude
that
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, even though
,
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the
internet
has some drawbacks which mainly make
people
away from each other, I strongly believe that it makes
people
more
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closer
,
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when
internet
applications are used in the proper way.
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