The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

The diagram illustrates the method by which dairy products are manufactured.

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, we could see healthy female cows

applygrazing

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on the farmland, the extracted milk is refrigerated and later

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to a conveying truck,taken to the factory house for

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production and purchase of the commodities in the respective business centres.

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, the female cows are mainly milked with a pumping machine twice a day as much of the liquid is stored in the refrigerator to prevent spoilage .

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later transported on a vehicle to the diary house for

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production of cheeses, cream and butter

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etc

. Are daily nutritional values for every

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, the recommended product is processed into

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bottles and branding packaging to attract consumers in supermarkets and malls.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

126 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

milking machines
containers
refrigerated trucks
pasteurization
homogenization
separation
standardization
cream
skim milk
fat content
packaging
cartons
bottles
dairy processing plant
quality control
safety and quality standards
distribution
retailers
grocery stores
vendors

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