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the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The given line graph demonstrates the amounts of
waste
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production
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 by companies from 2000 to 2015.
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, the
waste
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production
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 of
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 A and
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 B moderately decreased over time
whereas
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Company
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 C represents
upward
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an upward
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 trend over
period
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a period
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 of 15 years. In 2000,
Company
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 A started at 12
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tonness
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tonnes
 of
waste
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production
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,
then
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 declined just over the 9
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tonness
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tonnes
tones
 in 2010, and finished at well under the 9
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tonness
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tonnes
tonne
 after 5 years. From 2000 to 2005,
Company
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 B's
waste
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production
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 slightly increased, and It declined dramatically to approximately 3
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tonness
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tonnes
 between 2005 and 2015, before It reached a peak at over 10
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tonness
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tonnes
 in 2005.
In contrast
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,
Company
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 C rapidly inclined to roughly 6
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tonness
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tonnes
 of
waste
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 a year in 2005.
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, steadily rose between 2005 and 2010. From 2010 to 2015, the
production
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 of
waste
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 of
Company
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 C increased by 4
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tonness
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tonnes
 and reached a peak point in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, production, company, tonness with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amounts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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