Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

A huge amount of society substituted using paper-based sources and TV
news
streams to obtain some
news
to
internet
services. It is argued that because of convenience it is probably a good development,
while
others assume that it leads to gadget addiction. I suggest that providing
internet
sources
instead
of physical and media ones
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beneficial development. Nowadays, it is easier to obtain
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information
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it used to be before.
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consumers
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global network-connected device.
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, it is not necessary to
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a newspaper or wait until the
programm
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programme
will start,
as a
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people
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education, sport
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etc.
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group of sociologists found out that since
internet
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had provided
news
web-sites
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to the planet, started to economy approximately more than 25% of their
overall
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, which they used to
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on waiting
unlil
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until
the TV
programm
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programme
will start or a shop will be opened to buy
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news
.
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the other hand, society can forget about
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real life.
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network occupied a massive part of the community,
people
started to waste a number of time via their phones and computers, leading to decreasing amount of healthy activities and sports, leading to
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in
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of illnesses. To protect
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would like to
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produce
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effect
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effects
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of using
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internet
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,
such
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possibility to obtain
information
abount
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about
maintaining your health and a rich
vatiety
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variety
of beneficial
information
about sports activities.
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last
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medicine
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filed
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showed that since
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had started to be more
avalible
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available
via
internet
-providing,
people
started to be more aware
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health care and treatments. In conclusion, the
internet
news
countinue
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continue
continues
to dominate
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newspapers and TV
news
shows. Despite the possible drawback
such
as
kind
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of
internet-addiction
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,
people
recieve
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receive
more positive
concequences
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consequences
from that.
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