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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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A huge amount of society substituted using paper-based sources and TV
news
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 streams to obtain some
news
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 to
internet
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 services. It is argued that because of convenience it is probably a good development,
while
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 others assume that it leads to gadget addiction. I suggest that providing
internet
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 sources
instead
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 of physical and media ones
in
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 beneficial development. Nowadays, it is easier to obtain
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the required
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information
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that
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than
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 it used to be before.
Internet
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consumer
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consumers
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 may access to
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 amount of data
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in
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one click on
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their
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 global network-connected device.
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, it is not necessary to
but
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buy
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 a newspaper or wait until the
programm
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programme
 will start,
as a
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this
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 will save
people
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's time, which they are free to spend
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 education, sport
and
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etc.
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,
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a British
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 group of sociologists found out that since
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internet
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the internet
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 had provided
news
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web-sites
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websites
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 to the planet, started to economy approximately more than 25% of their
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free-time
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free time
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, which they used to
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spend
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 on waiting
unlil
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until
 the TV
programm
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programme
 will start or a shop will be opened to buy
a paper
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paper news
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news
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.
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 the other hand, society can forget about
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real life.
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the global
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 network occupied a massive part of the community,
people
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 started to waste a number of time via their phones and computers, leading to decreasing amount of healthy activities and sports, leading to
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 in
number
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a number
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 of illnesses. To protect
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i
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 would like to
prodive
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produce
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 about
positive
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the positive
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effect
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effects
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 of using
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the internet
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internet
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 for
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new
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,
such
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 as
a
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the
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 possibility to obtain
information
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abount
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about
 maintaining your health and a rich
vatiety
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variety
 of beneficial
information
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 about sports activities.
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, the
last
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 research in
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the
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medicine
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medical
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filed
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field
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 showed that since
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news
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the news
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 had started to be more
avalible
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available
 via
internet
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-providing,
people
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 started to be more aware
about
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of
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the
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apply
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health care and treatments. In conclusion, the
internet
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news
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countinue
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continue
continues
 to dominate
on
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apply
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newspapers and TV
news
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 shows. Despite the possible drawback
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kind
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the kind
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 of
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internet-addiction
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internet addiction
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,
people
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recieve
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receive
 more positive
concequences
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consequences
 from that.
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