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Some people think that importing movies and TV programmes from other countries is better for country . Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been an ongoing debate on playing foreign TV programmes and movies on local channels. Recently, a surge has been noticed
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 our
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 showcasing the entertainment channels of other countries. Some people favour
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 idea and claim that it makes our countrymen aware of various global cultures.
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, others argue that exposure to foreign traditions through social
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 may negatively impact our own norms.
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 both proponents have valid reasons to support their stance, I believe that local entertainment channels should be given priority over imported
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 with, producing dramas, talk shows, films, and other recreational programmes domestically creates multiple job vacancies.
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, making a single play needs
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 of a whole team of actors, cameramen, designers, IT professionals, and a number of miscellaneous crew members to carry out tedious tasks.
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, utilizing the talents of local people not only provides them with earning opportunities but
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 refrains us from spending our resources on foreign products.
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, encouraging to make TV serials and films inside the country flourishes the tourism industry as well. As an example, choosing scenic and less visited locations for picturization of recreational
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 may attract foreign tourists to our country and boost the economy.
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, selecting far-flung and underdeveloped places for
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 provide
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 of living
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 those people.
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, a multifold benefit will be gained in the long run. In conclusion, making use of the manpower and natural resources of our country will play a big role in introducing more employment chances and reflect our positive image to the world by introducing real and natural landscape beauty.

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Include a more balanced discussion of the opposing viewpoint to demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic. You could elaborate more on the benefits of importing foreign media and provide concrete examples.
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Watch for occasional language inaccuracies and minor grammatical issues. Although they do not significantly impede understanding, refining these can help further improve your score.
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The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively summarize the main points of the essay.
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Your main points are well-organized and supported with relevant and specific examples.
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You have successfully highlighted the benefits of producing local media in terms of job creation and tourism promotion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • economic benefits
  • cost-effective
  • extensive crew
  • expensive technology
  • importation and distribution sectors
  • diverse genres
  • storytelling techniques
  • healthy competition
  • talent recognition
  • collaborations
  • preserving local culture
  • promoting
  • employment opportunities
  • logistics
  • hospitality
  • equipment rental
  • national identity
  • pride
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • creative control
  • cultural nuances
  • societal norms
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