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In many countries, there are a lot of students who commit suicide each year. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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Recently the issue has been brought into focus is a lot of
students
 who commit suicide each year in many countries.
This
 is an alarming state of affairs and we should pay more attention to
this
. I will point out the reasons and solutions
about
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 the problem in
this
 essay. There is no denying that
parents
 have control over their
children
.
This
 can make the
children
 feel uncomfortable and independent. There are many reasons for
this
 problem. For one thing,
parents
 care and worry too much about the bad situation that may come to their
children
. The result is that the kids are depressed and overthinking.The most familiar example of
this
 is in Viet Nam, there are a lot of
students
 at a young age who don't want to talk with their family and
this
 leads to extreme things that they are autism. For another, the
parents
 put lots of pressure on their
children
.
Then
, they aren’t allowed to praise their voice.
Furthermore
, they totally betray what was told by the adults.
For example
,
the
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students
 in Asian countries have to do too much homework and
this
 is their duty.
Whereas
 there are some other reasons that come from the relationship between their friends and habitat. Probably, there is some truth in the idea that
the
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parents
 sometimes want to exercise too much control over their
children
. I will outline two measures that can be taken to avoid the suicide of
students
.
Firstly
, It is often better to negotiate responsibilities with adolescents than to impose responsibilities on them. To do that,
parents
 should talk with their kids frequently. Nothing could be more apparent than the evidence that a new family confessing show “Con da lon khon” was held in Viet Nam with many viewers.
Secondly
, the government can ensure that its policies take the interests of
children
 into account.
For example
,
students
 can attend some education meetings in school.
This
 would ensure that
students
 are continuously represented in the halls of power and they can speak out their rights. It is necessary that effective measures should be taken to take care of the
children
. We need to take action to avoid the bad situation that will happen
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 our
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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