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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study?

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Some
people
 choose to live abroad by leaving their native countries nowadays. It can give great
life
 experience by gaining relationships in order helps them to achieve their goals.
However
, they
also
 have to struggle with the new conditions, as one of the disadvantages.
To begin
 with, there are some drawbacks. Taking the decision to live abroad means
people
 have to live far away from their family and community.
This
 condition sometimes impacts their relationship.
For instance
, my friend who left the country has not socialised more with her community in Indonesia even though she has kept contacted with them.
Hence
, there are some walls between her and the community in their relationship. Another con is leaving abroad can be more challenging when they do not have enough money.
For example
, they needed it to pay taxes, flats, and kinds of stuff to support their activity there.
By contrast
, there are two benefits for
people
 who are brave to step out of their comfort zone for a better
life
.
Firstly
, folk who live abroad have the opportunity to expand their network with many
people
 from diverse backgrounds. To specify, the situation is able to gain their skills in communication which impacts their work or in society.
Secondly
,
people
also
 comprehend a new language and culture. To support
this
, those who live in the UK get the chance to build their skills by learning a new language from
people
 they meet .
Additionally
, learning a new culture will
also
 increase their knowledge about another country.
Thus
, it will impact their social
life
while
 leaving far away from their family.
To sum up
, I strongly believe living abroad will be a remarkable experience since
people
 have to go out of their comfort zone. So, they not only boost networking but
also
 may have the opportunity to build a better
life
 in the future.
Submitted by ieltscuns2022 on

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