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Theme: It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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No doubt,
history
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 plays an essential role in everyone's life as they become familiar with the bygone
days
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 the question is that in
school
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 local
history
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 teaches
instead
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 of foreign
history
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 .Personally, I agree with the statement and in
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 trend. To commence with favour points that in the academy , local background
history
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 should be taught so that children become familiar with their part-time period.Needless to say , these
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 a very less number of students know about their
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 is because of world
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 which is taught in
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 .
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, in CBSE and other national and international boards schools, most part of the
history
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 is covered by British and other
countries
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history
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.
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, they are unaware of their own culture and traditions
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. Probing
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,if in
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 local
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 teach
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 , children never feel uncomfortable and sham front of anyone
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 telling about their region's
history
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 as they already have that much information which is fruitful for them .
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 ,they can easily explain
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their past
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 because in
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days
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 they did a lot of study on it .
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. in the past few
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 , local
history
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 is teach to students can they have more knowledge about them than today's generation's children. In conclusion,
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 foreign
history
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 is not bad to study because details about anything are not toxic ,
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, local
history
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 is very important because they came to know about their grandparent's time period generation .
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