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It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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As the development of
technology
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 grows rapidly, electronic
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such
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 as mobile phones and laptops, are more and more common to be seen everywhere. Using
technology
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devices
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 has become a part of human daily living, and it is not surprising that we may see people utilize them in school.
While
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 some people disagree with the idea of using electronic
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 in the classroom, I believe that
technology
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 used in education has more benefits than drawbacks. Mobile phones or other electronic
devices
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 are more amusing than ordinary textbooks, so some people are worried that
students
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 may be distracted, which leads to not paying attention to classes.
For example
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,
instead
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 of focusing on class,
students
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 may tend to scroll social media on their phones, send messages, or play games on the internet. It may interrupt their studies and learn less in the end.
However
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, in my opinion, teachers can take advantage of
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 electronic
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 to attract
students
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' attention to participate more in class.
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, teachers display videos about the author's life story in literature classes, which is more appealing than just reading the introduction in the book, resulting in
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 being more motivated to attend classes.
In addition
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, electronic
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 are
also
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 helpful for teachers. They can use applications to check if any
students
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 are absent or conclude
students
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' thoughts more efficiently by putting their ideas on an e-whiteboard in order. In conclusion, there are places for electronic
devices
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 to be used in the classroom by combining the advantages of
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such
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 as rapid, efficiency into education. I reckon with the idea that learning can be as interesting as playing games, which enhances
students
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' motivation to gain more knowledge and memorize it more easily.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Integration
  • Educational settings
  • Learning tools
  • Educational apps
  • Modern teaching methods
  • Unrestricted access
  • Distractions
  • Learning focus
  • Balanced approach
  • Usage policies
  • Pedagogical benefits
  • Classroom dynamics
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