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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustrations describe the manufacturing process of liquid
chocolate
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 in the factory in Homeland.
Overall
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, the production of liquid
chocolate
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 consists of 10 steps, which started with the growth of red
pods
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 from the
cacao
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trees
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 and finished with the production of liquid
chocolate
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 from
beans
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.
Cacao
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beans
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 are the primary raw materials for making
chocolate
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 and are grown in the
pods
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 of
cacao
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trees
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.
Initially
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,
cacao
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trees
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 are grown in South America, Africa, and Indonesia. The
cacao
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trees
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 produced large red
pods
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, and once the red
pods
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 are ripened, the farmers harvested them with the help of a large, sharp blade.
Then
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 the
pods
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 are cut open with machinery to remove the
beans
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 inside. After which, the
beans
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 are taken to the fermentation area, where workers leave them to ferment in large boxes. The next stage is to dry the seeds in the sun by spreading them on large trays.
Subsequently
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, the
beans
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 are put in large sacks by hand and sorted to be exported to the processing factory by lorry.
Next,
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they are supplied to the factory, the
beans
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 are roasted in a machine at 350 °C. After that, the seeds are poured into a grinder to separate the outer husk.
Consequently
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, the
beans
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 are squeezed in a hydraulic press, and
chocolate
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 liqueur is extracted.
Finally
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, the liquid
chocolate
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 is packed and ready to be distributed to bakeries and shops all over the world to make a wide variety of cakes, biscuits, and
chocolate
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 bars.
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