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An international company is offering a temporary job for work experience, write a letter to apply for that job. You need to explain where did you find this information why you want to apply this job what qualification you have what position you want to apply

#company #job #work #information #qualification #position
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to express my interest in one of the job positions which was recently advertised
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 your company website. I am primarily looking for exciting opportunities where I can utilize my capabilities which benefits the organization. I find the job position in the advert suitable for my profile and area of interest. I am an engineering graduate who
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passed out from
College
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 of Engineering, Toronto in October 2023. I am particularly interested in software development which was my major during my studies.
Besides
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 completed a three-month course in Java and
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Sun-Certified
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a Sun-Certified
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 Java Professional certificate. As I understand, there are openings for multiple job positions across various
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However
, I am specifically looking for the Java Developer role in Ontario. I am sure I would excel in
this
 role if I am provided with a chance. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Gloria Sherin Mathew
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Task Achievement
Ensure the introduction and body of the letter address all aspects of the task clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and paragraphs to organize your ideas effectively.
Enhancement
Consider providing more specific examples of your relevant skills or experiences to strengthen your application.
Task Achievement
You've clearly addressed where you found the job and why you are interested, which shows good task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is well-organized with a logical flow, demonstrating strong coherence and cohesion.
Appropriate Tone
Your polite tone and formal closing are appropriate for the context.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job opportunity
  • professional networking site
  • job board
  • referral
  • enthusiasm
  • relevant qualifications
  • certifications
  • previous work experiences
  • suitable candidate
  • career aspirations
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