You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Mr Jaloliddinov, I am very happy to send my congratulation. Because I have learned a lot of receipts from your cookery course.

Firstly

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Before

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apply

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I had

not

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tonot

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know

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cakes

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about cakes

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after I learned very delicious things.

Such

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cakes

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, foods, salats and others. Especially, I have cooked all of

things

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the things

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for my husband's birthday. Everybody

were

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happy

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with

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me.

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mother in-law

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, If I tell

truth

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, the course is given income to our family. Because several people are booking

cakes

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for holidays, parties and others.

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, I am happy.

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neighbors

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booked 3

cakes

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for

sons'

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my sons'

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parties. So, I should cook every day.

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, I am going to open my market. It was my dream. I might give work for

unemployers

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unemployed

employees

. I look forward to your answer letter. Thank you very much. Yours sincerely, Xadiyabonu Sidiqova.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

141 words

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