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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
Some people argue that wages should not be paid for teenage workers who spend their free time on
work
 in the
community
 so that can lead to some beneficial skills to teenagers and
also
 good to the
community
. In my opinion,
This
 can not be acceptable for youngsters who attempt to live on their own.
This
 essay partially
agree
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 with
this
 topic and will discuss both views On the one hand, It can reduce
an
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the
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 expenditure of
community
 organization
who
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that
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 works for
public
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the public
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 without paid
as well as
 it
also
 can contribute youngsters to
gain
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 essential skill and social skill which could help them to grow up effectively and can face
to
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apply
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a
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 real world.
For example
, some
community
 group
who
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works for a charity and give all money they earn to a donation for stray dogs.
This
 can be seen as a positive
affect
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effect
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to
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on
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 the
community
, teenagers
as well as
 dogs.
On the other hand
,
while
 it can be a positive aspect
to
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 teenagers, it
also
 can exhaust them in case it is hard
work
 or some
work
 that requires them to use their force.
Besides
, youngsters can be distracted from their classes by
this
work
 and they would think that it is not worth participating in public
work
.
To conclude
, It could depend on how hard they have to
work
 and
these
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both views could have beneficial positive effects
to
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on
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 young people and even
community
organization
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organizations
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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