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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or waste of time? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#students #gap #year #university #travel #gain #work #idea #waste #time
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of
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teenagers who graduated from
the
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high school, take a gap year before enrolling in college to experience
internship
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an internship
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 or take a rest. Getting away from studying has advantages and disadvantages. In
this
essay
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i
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 will discuss
that
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it’s
 beneficial or wasting time.
it’s
 very important that young people immediately after finishing
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school, what do they want to select and how they pass
this
 time. On the one hand, Before registering in college, having experience
about
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 their field as
apprenticeship
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an apprenticeship
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 and working with potential employers, is the best opportunity related to
specialist
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a specialist
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 subject.
Beside
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that
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 it has
impact
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an impact
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 on academic gain to be successful in the business.
Furthermore
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 most
of
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students
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the students
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 are exhausted from learning so they don’t have
adequate
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the adequate
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 ambition to
persue
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pursue
 their
study
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studies
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 and
consequently
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it’s
 possible to
failed
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 in university. In
this
situation
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 there are several
way
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ways
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 to get energy and refresh their mentality and body aspects
such
 as
traveling
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travelling
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, learning kinds of sports,
having
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and having
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 spare time to do
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the favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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 job.
On the other hand
 ,
it’s
 possible that after 1 year , more and more young people be got away from studying and would be not interested in
educating
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 so don’t tend to
enroll
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 in university and
consequently
to
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lead to be unrestrained.
More over
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, in some countries
as
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 mine,
if
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boys who passed
the
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school that don’t inclined to
registry
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university
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for university
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have
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and have
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 to pass military
services
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service
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 so they
lagging
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lag
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 behind
growth
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 and progress. In conclusion, in my view taking a gap year is
good
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 idea and
pros
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the pros
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 of
this
 short break
is
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 overweight of cons.
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