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Many today feel that attention spans are becoming shorter due to the prevalence of social media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the digital age, social
media
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 has become more popular for all walks of life and has impacted
attention
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 spans. I strongly agree with
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 notion
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 the effect of it on people's behaviour and the more dopamine produced by the human body. First of all, spending several hours on social
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 has changed society's behaviour.
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, it has made them more introverted.
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, they do not pay
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 to anything even their family.
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, we can see that the new generation does not have any tendency to focus on something .
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 to the revolution in society's action, I do believe the increase of dopamine production in our body is an irrefutable reason for the fall in
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 spans. To clarify, because of fun subjects that people see on social
media
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 or who can attend to them the rate of dopamine increase in their body which lead to a decrease in
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 spans. So, people prefer to achieve
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 pleasure
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 of spending their time on other activities
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 many of them who just seeking happiness encourage others to follow them. Some may claim that these consequence does not relate to each other and reduce in
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 spans has other reasons like a more mature nation in society who take care of their time and do not like to waste it.
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, they just simply overlooked and did not see the side effect of social
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 on
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 consequence. In conclusion, the majority of folks feel that
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 spans becoming shorter
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 the side effects of social
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. I strongly agree with
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 notion
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 changes in community behaviour and more attractive topics on social
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