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Living In A Country Where You Have To Speak A Foreign Language Can Cause Serious Social And Practical Problems To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #language
At
this
 time, the source of the serious and practical problems is communicating in another
language
 in a country. I strongly agree with
this
 option, because a lot of people are suffering from
this
 including me. I will support
this
 view in the following paragraphs. First of all, speaking in a foreign
language
 can cause plenty of
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unnecessary
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 issues. Because
language
 is the most important thing in the nation, the community understand and speaks to each other in the
language
 .
For example
 , in
the
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Kazakhstan, most of the inhabitants use Russian, and
due to
this
 fact in the society happen some argue and even fight.
As a result
 , between the two nations could be some grudges. It badly contributes to the kingdom.
Secondly
 , several citizens cannot get a job,
due to
 not knowing the method of communication.
Thus
 , most of the citizens will
unemployed
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, and it will influence poorly to the country.
Moreover
 , there will be chaos in the city.
For instance
 , in Kazakhstan
live
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there are
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 a lot of foreign individuals,
and
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who
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 cannot read the advertisements in the city.
Thus
 , they would not get a job. Even, there are the statistics of unemployed residents, which consist of half of the kingdom.
To sum up
 , from the arguments and examples given I strongly agree with the notion that, people should speak in the native dialect. It prevents problems
such
 as unemployment and conflict in the community.
Furthermore
 , it will guarantee the friendship mood in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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