school teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of students than parents . to what extent do agree or disagree
It is often thought that
school
instructors have greater accountability for the communal and mental growth of pupils
compared to their parents
. Even though, I strongly agree with this
opinion,I believe that parents
have a crucial role
in their offspring's breeding.
At the outset,Educators have a direct effect on the mental and social status of the students because the teachers are well-trained and teach them formal lessons.Firstly
,school
instructors educate the pupils
on different kinds of subjects, such
as,
Mathematics, Physics, and chemistry, so children’s abilities to think will grow.Remove the comma
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In addition
to that,teachers induce them to do and practice more than one type of exercise and practical laboratory, therefore
, the student’s logical thinking,reasoning abilities, and problem-solving skills will become much better.Secondly
,school
is the best environment which encourages students to socialize and make more friends as it teaches them how to deal perfectly with each other throughout daily classroom activities.Consequently
,their social skill will be affected directly and become much better.Furthermore
, pupils
can interact with each other via extracurricular activities, such
as,
sports events, music concerts, and scouting, so the student's leadership activities, camaraderie, co-operations, and working in teamwork will increase result in a positive effect on society.Remove the comma
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That is
why educators have a great effect on the cognitive and community maturing of pupils
.
In sharp contrast to this
, parents
have an important role
in the social and mental evolution of their children.First of all, parents
educate them on basic ethical principles, for example
, teaching them how to deal with and respect other people particularly old age .Moreover
, they educate them on how to think in a proper way,so they will be able to differentiate between the right things that they have to do and the bad things to keep themselves away from it .Though,
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role
of parents
in the breeding of their children, this
home education will not ensure a bright future to
them, so they have to send them to schools.
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To conclude
, I agree that school
instructors have huge benefits on the social and mental growth of children, but I can not avoid the efficient role
of parents
which is so important.Submitted by sm710129 on
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