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Some people believe that artificial intelligence (AI) has the power to improve our lives. However, others are worried that it could have a negative impact. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that artificial intelligence has the power to make our
lives
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 easy,
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 others think that it could have a negative impact.
This
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 essay will discuss both views. In my opinion, artificial intelligence can make our
lives
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 easy. There are many advantages of AI by which we being humans can improve our
lives
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.
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 as, It can do anything very quickly and without human errors.
Furthermore
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, It can
work
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 without any breaks because it is not a living thing so, it does not get tired.
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, one of the studies shows that Apple is the world's fastest organisation which executes tasks very quickly the reason is that 90 per cent of their staff are
robots
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 who
work
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 24 hours a day, which means they do not take any breaks like humans
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 they do not make any mistakes during
work
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.
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,
according to
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 some communities,
robots
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 can affect our
lives
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 in a negative way. Because of their high efficiency, some people believe that unemployment can be caused by the use of
robots
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.
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, companies will prefer
robots
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instead
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 of people because they do not charge any money to
work
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 a full day without any breaks.
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, in my country Pakistan where unemployment is very common the main reason is that every institute in Pakistan is using artificial intelligence
instead
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 of folks as it costs very low
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compared to folks
also
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 they
work
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 with high efficiency and without making any errors. In conclusion, I prefer using AI to improve our
lives
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. Even though there are disadvantages of AI the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses both views on artificial intelligence and provides a clear opinion on the topic. However, the explanation on how AI improves lives could be more detailed and provide additional examples.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with minor grammatical errors and punctuation, such as starting 'It' with a capital letter after a comma in the second paragraph. More varied sentence structures could improve readability and demonstrate a higher level of writing skill.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph follows logically from the previous one, but consider adding more linking words or phrases to improve the overall flow. This will make your argument more cohesive and easy to follow.
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The introduction clearly states the purpose of the essay and outlines both sides of the argument. This helps set the stage for the discussion.
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The conclusion reiterates your own opinion effectively and summarizes the key points discussed in the essay.
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You have provided relevant examples, such as the use of AI in Apple and the situation in Pakistan. These examples help to illustrate your points and make your arguments more convincing.
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