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some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. others disagree and think that the host contry should welcome cultural differences. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #customs #behaviour #host #contry #differences
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I guess,For ,Instance as an overseas worker I was a race from an Asian ethnicity part of the eastern globe where now I can say it is an open
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.I mean most of our traditions and culture are not too much conservative,because were invaded by different nationalities from Spaniards, Japanese and Americans. they say
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 statistic most Filipinos are happy and has a hospitality attitude.Maybe
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 trait was an attribute inherited from our ancestors. In my opinion,now I was working here middle east where most of the parts of the land were deserts seldom you can find a green view, which has a big difference compared to my
country
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 where I was born have trees and high peak mountains usually tourist spots.In
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religion here most people practise Islam, where they are doing the five pillars which are faith, prayer,fasting,giving and pilgrimage. These are some examples of local traits that exercising here.
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 as a visitor to
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 we should respect their way of life example,wear a dress they called an abaya, which is appropriate in
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 to respect the tradition which a woman wore,another is when you hear an azan it means praying time you can hear
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 five times a day,
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 men separated from women
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 praying and
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 at the open or public places that man who is not part of a family should not mix in a restaurant or food court.At the time of ,prayers we should give them a couple of minutes to pray before continuing the work or any transaction
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 started. In sum , foreigners that are visiting the
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 they may go must be flexible and should give way, and adjust to the customs and behaviour knowing the place before you go or travel is better so that you will be aware of what is right and wrong
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 respect for their cultures.
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