Discuss why successful sports professionals earning a lot more money than people in other important professions is an unfair practice. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In
todays
world Change to a genitive case
today's
sport
stars are playing Fix the agreement mistake
sports
vital
role . They are representing our Add an article
a vital
the vital
nation
at Use synonyms
national
level . They are Add an article
the national
a national
idiol
for their Correct your spelling
ideal
idol
nation
.Every single Use synonyms
person
Use synonyms
watch
sports with enthralling nature . Correct subject-verb agreement
watches
Sport
Change the noun form
Sports
person
is someone who Use synonyms
behave
in do or die manner when they play for our Change the verb form
behaves
nation
.
Use synonyms
According to
my opinion , Linking Words
Its
is not necessary that every Correct pronoun usage
It
sport
Change the noun form
sports
person
Use synonyms
have
luxurious life or they are wealthy.At the same Fix the infinitive
to have
time
we all know that truth always Add a comma
,time
win
and without Correct subject-verb agreement
wins
persuasion
there is no success.
Add a comma
,persuasion
Overall
, Linking Words
who
is genuine and honest will Correct pronoun usage
those who
definately
grab success in their life irrespective of their field .
I have one example for Correct your spelling
definitely
this
statement , IPL is Linking Words
famous
tournament in Add an article
a famous
the famous
india
.The youth of our Change the capitalization
India
nation
Use synonyms
always
attracted towards Add a missing verb
are always
this
tournament .The players from all over the world play together divided by the state name of Linking Words
india
. All famous players Change the capitalization
India
Linking Words
for
instance , virat kohli ,ms.dhoni, Add the comma(s)
,for
yuvraj
singh many more . There was Change the capitalization
Yuvraj
player
who had just started getting fame, whose name was Add an article
a player
the player
shrishant
. Shrishant was Change the capitalization
Shrishant
very
Correct article usage
a very
tremandus
player .Even Correct your spelling
tremendous
he
had scored amazing scores during Correct word choice
though he
worldcup
,Correct your spelling
World Cup
Linking Words
however
he did Add a comma
,however
huge
Correct article usage
a huge
omission
Fix the agreement mistake
omissions
of
his life .
He got Change preposition
in
involed
in the Correct your spelling
involved
match fixing
.Somehow ,Indian news channels broadcast Add a hyphen
match-fixing
this
truth on Linking Words
the
national television . Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, it was breaking news of that year . He got jailed for Linking Words
few
years .On the Correct article usage
a few
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
hand
his career was destroyed. He was banned by Add a comma
,hand
Correct article usage
the indian
indian
cricket league .
Change the capitalization
Indian
To sum up
, a Linking Words
person
Use synonyms
who
can earn billions of money if he has well Correct pronoun usage
apply
intention
.Fix the agreement mistake
intentions
Its
a famous statement , Replace the word
It's
It is
path
of truth is difficult ,Add an article
the path
a path
although
its result is Linking Words
long lasting
.Add a hyphen
long-lasting
To
Change preposition
In
the
addition ,Correct article usage
apply
path
of dishonesty is effortless .Add an article
the path
a path
Linking Words
Likewise
its result is Add a comma
,Likewise
draconion
.Correct your spelling
draconian
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