The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information regarding the
amount
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number
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of
tourists
visiting Europe to three different regions in the span of 20 years between 1987 and 2007. In general, the mountains
has
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the least number of
visitors
relatively over the period given.
Whereas
, the coast attracted most of the
tourists
visiting Europe.
Initially
, there are only 10
thousands
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visitors
who visited the lakes in 1987 which is the lowest number among
three
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the three
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destinatons
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destinations
. After that, it rose dramatically reaching
peak
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a peak
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of 75
thousands
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thousand
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tourists
in 2002.
subsequently
, the figure dropped to 50
thousands
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thousand
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at the end
of the period. Regarding the
visitors
of the coast, the
amount
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number
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of people going to the coast fell slightly in 1992 by the number of 35
thousands
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thousand
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. Following that, it increased reaching 75
thousands
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thousand
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through out
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throughout
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the period. Meanwhile, the figure of
tourists
to the mountains was growing relatively stable by only gaining 15
thousands
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thousand
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visitors
from 1987 to 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, visitors, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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