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The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005

The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005
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The bar chart compares the
proportion
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 of the governmental
budget
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 for
road
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 and
transport
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 in different four
countries
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 between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, we can see that the percentage of expenditures on
road
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 and
transport
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 in
Italia
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 and Portugal accounted for the most during the given period,
while
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 UK and
USA
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 spent lower their
budget
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 on
road
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 and
transport
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 than both previous
countries
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. In 1990, the
proportion
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 of spending on
road
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 and
transport
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 in
Italia
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 and Portugal was approximately 23% and 27%, respectively, and these were the highest point among
four
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the four
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countries
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.
In contrast
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, UK and
USA
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 recorded 10% of their
budget
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 on
road
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 and
transport
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. 5 years later, four
countries
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 had a downward trend slightly. In 2000,
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Italia
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Italy
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 and Portugal took up the highest point at almost a quarter,
while
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 the percentage of expenses on
road
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 and
transport
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 was just under 15%.
At the end
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 of the period, the
proportion
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 of financial
budget
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 by governments in two
countries
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 (
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Italia
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Italy
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 and Portugal) declined to nearly one-half, whilst the funding
proportion
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 for
road
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 and
transport
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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 only went up to 15%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, budget, road, transport, countries, italia, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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