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some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that countries have invested substantial amounts of money in
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 some people think
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 activity is a waste of resources, others argue that humans must continue to explore the universe. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of
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 topic and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, governments cannot disregard that
space
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exploration
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 is widely underrated when it comes to social priorities.
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 is because the population are normally unaware of the benefits
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 activity can bring to them, so they think it represents
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 of money and time.
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 of knowledge about the topic, people do not trust that anything from
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 could improve
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 lives on Earth.
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, the outcomes of
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 explorations have not been totally disclosed by the authorities.
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, there are many documentaries that
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 everything about the explorations, but not their results though.
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, learning more about the universe can be the answer to many problems that humanity has recently been facing.
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, a new source of clean energy can be found
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 other planets, so petrol, which is highly polluting, could be replaced.
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, other essential elements to humans,
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 as water and oxygen, will possibly be discovered, making
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 life
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 other planets a possible alternative.
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, a recent article reported that small particles of water were identified in the
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 expedition to Mars.
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,
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 is not a waste of resources as it can improve and expand people’s quality of life.
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 there are disadvantages
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 as the lack of information,
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 can help to find new sources of clean energy and new environments that can make life
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 other planets possible. Personally, I feel that these benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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