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Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's world, it is common to see that advertising plays a vital role in
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 can see different kinds of
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 every day.
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, there are some
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 who tend to think that advertising is too widespread and they are
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 of them. But others suggest that advertising is a great way how to make
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 buy different things. In my
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 I will discuss both opinions.
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, there is a view where some
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 say that advertising is
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 common and trivial thing nowadays and they do not pay attention to it. It is clearly seen that a lot of companies, who want to become successful in their area, prefer copying the idea of
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 of popular companies,
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 as Coca-Cola, Pepsi, Milka, Kinder and so on. So
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 are aware of
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 they want to see something new and unusual, an advertisement that will be catchy and gripping, not a copy of someone else. There is a reason why
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 are tired of advertising nowadays.
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, some
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 suggest that advertising is the best way how to make your product more successful, so
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 will want to buy
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. I think the main reason is the increasing popularity of opportunities provided by information technology. I mean,
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 can use different types of graphics, that will catch
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's attention or use popular songs of famous artists in their videos to make them more widespread and catchy. There is a reason why a lot of
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 think that advertisement is a good idea to make
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 buy products. In conclusion, I would like to say that I agree with groups of
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 who tend to think that advertising is an excellent idea to make your products be sold. It is clearly seen that companies use different types of advertising : videos, posters, and catchy song in the background and that's the thing that
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 these
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 not common to others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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