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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both views and then give your opinion

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The
growth
 of overseas companies in the country become a debatable reason for taking the place of the
nation
's own
products
.
However
, some minds claim that with the invasion of these marketing, the
growth
 and development of the
nation
 by exchanging ideas, language and
culture
 overseas. I personally agree with the latter aforementioned statement.
To begin
 with, disturbing the public by least using their own
nation
's made product. By manufacturing foreign
products
 in local areas, people attract to Western countries'
products
.
For example
, with the expansion of foreign factories, people prefer these
products
instead
 of local
products
 which causes loss to local companies and shopkeepers.
Thus
, it intrudes into the country.
Additionally
, sometimes people prefer Western
culture
 to their own
culture
. Moving to the benefits of overseas manufacturing, it increases the economic
growth
 of the countries by expanding their business between them. To illustrate
this
, India imports electric machinery, crude petroleum and so on and exports jewellery, pharmaceutical
products
 and many more to other countries.
Moreover
,
this
 business between the different nations enhances their friendship and a peaceful environment between these nations which leads to minimising chances of war between them. Eventually, the mingling of
culture
 and language and exchanging of ideas happens only in international business by which the hope for the
growth
 of the
nation
 is for sure.
To conclude
, there is no doubt, that international marketing may hurt local businesses
nonetheless
 cons are more for the acceleration of the production of the country which we can't unsee.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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