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The graph and chart give information on the aveage daily maximum and minimum temperature in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities

The graph and chart give information on the aveage daily maximum and minimum temperature in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities
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The bar chart and the line graph illustrate the statistics concerning the mean of daily extreme and minimum
temperature
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 in
degrees
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 Celsius and the mean of
days
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 with
rainfall
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 each month in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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. From the first graph, the maximum temperatures in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 were the highest in the first and
last
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 month of the
year
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 and the minimum temperatures were the lowest from June to August. The extreme
temperature
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 in
Brisbane
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 peaked at 30
degrees
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 in January. The highest maximum
temperature
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 in
Canberra
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 was approximately 27
degrees
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 during January, February, and December. The
temperature
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 in In July, the least
temperature
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 in
Brisbane
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 bottomed out at 10
degrees
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 in continued until the end of August, in the same month the
temperature
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 in
Canberra
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 was approximately 2
degrees
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. Concerning the average number of
days
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 with
rainfall
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 in these two cities. The three middle
months
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 of the
year
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 in
Canberra
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 had the most
days
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 with
rainfall
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 which was 10.
In contrast
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,
Brisbane
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 experienced the least
days
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 with
rainfall
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 during those
months
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 from June to August (roughly 7
days
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). For
Brisbane
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, the most
days
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 with
rainfall
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 were in February and March (14
days
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).
On the other hand
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, the minimum
days
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 with
rainfall
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 recorded in
Canberra
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 were in the five first
months
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 and the two
last
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months
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 of the
year
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.
Overall
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, these two graphs have a positive correlation. During different periods of the
year
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, the number of
days
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 with
rainfall
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also
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 rises
along with
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 the
temperature
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, degrees, days, rainfall, brisbane, canberra, year, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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