In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

Few topics are more important than cultural challenges in the modern world. Among cultural and traditional issues old or traditional
languages
, and the issue of preventing
languages
will probably always be controversial. some believe that it is the communities' responsibility to prevent and maintain local and traditional
languages
and dialects
however
others point out to the youngsters and claim it is unescapable to abandon local
languages
. It seems to me nowadays, everything is going to change
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younger
people
and traditional
languages
will have the same destiny. The essay will discuss the subject. The main idea would appear to be the number of youths that they lead to forget old
languages
. Teens claim that in
this
period old
languages
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necessary and they prefer to talk in applied
languages
like English or Latin.
For example
, foreign countries like international students should learn to speak
languages
known to most
people
.
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popular
languages
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people
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we mean that
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languages
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more convenient for communication.
Moreover
,
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believe that
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tongue is not suitable for many societies and they are rust and
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can not be fluent in it. Admittedly, proponents of
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traditional
languages
maintain that
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the mother tongue is the language that they grew up with and is the ability that they should take care of
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and it is one of the heritage of
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.
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,
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enough to protect traditional
languages
.
To conclude
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number of reasons
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convincing to think like younger ages and use popular
languages
.
While
the idea of young
people
is not enough for
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to
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not use
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tongue and
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not protect
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