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Behaviour in school is getting worse. Explain the causes and the effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

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These days, the
behaviour
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 of school-age
children
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 is getting worse. The main reason for by is that they are not given enough attention by their
parents
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 and
teachers
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.
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, the youngest become owners of bad
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. One of the most serious reasons for
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 is that
parents
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 spend less time with their
children
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. Most of the
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 are not able to provide proper education in time
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 of working hard.
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,
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 in schools are more involved with gifted and talented
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. Left-out
children
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 feel lonely. Especially teenagers who fall into
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 situations consider themselves to be an unnecessary piece of things in society.
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,
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 start to develop various bad habits (they do not respect their
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, they do not listen to the teacher, they do not appreciate the words of their well-behaved friends, etc.). Even when the situation is difficult, they resort to crime. For
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 things,
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 of all,
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 need qualified and experienced psychologists. Psychologists are masters of their work. They will certainly give all the help they can to make the
children
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 as they were before. But their support is a bit lacking.
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 of all,
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 help their offspring, and
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teachers
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, friends and others
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 support them. In conclusion, to prevent
children
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 from becoming owners of
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 bad
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,
parents
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 should
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 pay attention. The most important thing that
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 and
teachers
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 give to
children
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 is
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 of all good
behaviour
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 and a good upbringing.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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