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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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This
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USA
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the USA
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, Sweden and Japan.
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, the evolution of the US and Sweden is very constant and regular,
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 the
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Japanese
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 is more
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aggressive
. In general, the curve
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 to increase faster in the 1960s, it is not the case for Japan,
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 in the 2000s. In Sweden in 1940 7% of the population was 65
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years old
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 or over,
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decreased
 notably in 1980 when it grew to 14%,
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and in
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 40 years the percentage of old people doubled.
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, in the US the evolution is quite similar, except in the 2010s when the difference was
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6%. Getting interested in Japan, we can realize that contrary to the other two countries, between 1940 and 2000 the proportion of
elderly
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the elderly
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 was under 5% and it was not until the 2000s that started to increase. Nowadays, in the 2020s
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 the graph, in 2040 the percentage
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 be
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27%.
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