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The plans below show how the ground of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by seclecting and reporting the main features.

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Presented for consideration are 3 pictures showing how a building changed in the three main periods. It can be clear to see that the building had changed three times. Changing from the office first to the apartment before changing to the flower shop. Everything was changed over the years but the kitchen is an exception. Looking at the left bottom of the pictures, there was a small toilet when the building was an office. After using it as an apartment since 1985, the small toilet had been rebuilt to be a bathroom and shower which was bigger. The bathroom and shower were used as a play operation in 2001. Moving to the right of the maps, there was a manager's station and reception area in 1985.
However
, that place was changed to two bedrooms of the apartment before rebuilding to work as a flower shop and a place for displaying their products in 2001. Turning to the kitchen which hadn't been replaced for years, to the right and opposite the cooking space, there was a meeting
room
 in the period of being used as a service. After that time, the area was expanded to be a living
room
 in 1985. Another major change to the area has been the making
room
 for the gift cards field in 2001. One notable change is that the assistant's post and secretary's office had been cleared to make
room
 for a flower display.
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