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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.
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The given bar chart compares the number of
people
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visited
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who visited
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 to
cimenas
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cinemas
 in one particular European nation on different days
by
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 three different years. In 2003, 2005 and 2007, the most number of
people
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 visited the
cineams
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cinemas
cinema
 on Saturday
while
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 the lowest number of
people
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 visited the
cinemas
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 on
Monday
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. In 2005, 45% of individuals tend to
visited
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visit
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 the
cinemas
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 on Saturday. between 2003 and 2007, 40% and around 42% of
people
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 visited
cinemas
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 on the same day. 30% of
people
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 visited
cinemas
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 on
Friday
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Fridays
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three
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for three
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 different years.
By contrast
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, in the past,
people
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 did not often
visited
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visit
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 the
cinemas
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Monday
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Mondays
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. 10% to below 15% of
people
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 visited
cinemas
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 on
Monday
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. from 2003 to 2007, the figure decreased dramatically on Wednesday. More than 30% of
people
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 tend to
visited
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visit
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cinemas
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on
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from
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 Friday to Sunday. below than 23% of
people
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 visited
cinemas
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 on
Monday
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 to Thursday between 2003 to 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cinemas, monday with synonyms.
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