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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Every individual is strongly connected with the
country
 where they were born. At the same
moment
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 people are citizens of the world. Public concern has arisen about whether professionals,
such
 as doctors and engineers, should be required to
work
 just in the
country
 where they did their training or in another
country
 if they wish. In my essay, I will explain
this
. Some people assert that during the individual’s education, they received benefits and support from the place they study.
As a result
, the
country
 wants their skills for feedback to stay and
work
 in the same.
For instance
, Kolkata Medical University allows an excellent medical education for five hundred students every year. But after
graduation
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 many students leave India and their homeland
encounter
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 a severe brain drain.
In contrast
, some others may claim that people should be free in their choices of
the
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country
 for
work
. Moving to another location, workers prospect different lifestyles and career opportunities.
Therefore
, they can improve their skills more than when they stay in the same place for a long time allowing professionals to
work
 in other nations can enhance the sharing of expertise and culture across international borders.
For instance
, doctors move to the United Arab Emirates after Kolkata Medical University. Meeting colleagues from various countries, they improve their own knowledge and skills. On the basis of the above discussion, I tend to believe that professionals of different spheres should have the opportunity to decide where they want to live and
work
. I am strongly convinced that
such
position
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lead
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 to personal and
country
 development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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